Tuesday, September 28, 2010

Corrections for Villains.

Uncorrected One:
Darth Vader is a villain I like the most. He is evil, blood-thirsty, not merciful , and very persuasive. In the fourth episode, he killed many of his own soldiers for making the slightest mistake. He almost killed his own son and almost turned him to the "Dark Side". Darth Vader fascinates me, because he turned to the Dark Side because he had a dream that his wife was going to die. He also fascinates me because h also survived being burned in lava. Darth Vader is made up of all the villain's traits. He is terrifying, tall, strong, evil, and very ugly. Darth Vader also killed a lot of innocent tribes and relatives. This lack of mercy is what makes a villain a true villain.
Corrected One:
Darth Vader is the villain I like the most. He is evil, blood-thirsty, unmerciful , and very persuasive. In the fourth episode, he killed many of his own soldiers for making the slightest mistake. He almost killed his own son and nearly turned him to the "Dark Side". Darth Vader fascinates me for he turned to the Dark Side because he had a dream that his wife was going to die. He also fascinates me because he also survived being burned in lava. Darth Vader is made up of all the villain's traits. He is terrifying, tall, strong, evil, and very ugly. Darth Vader also killed a lot of innocent creatures like the Ewoks.. This lack of mercy is what makes a villain a true villain.

1 comment:

  1. He's made up of all the traits of a villain, but he didn't start that way, did he? In fact, quite the opposite. What made him go bad? Food for thought.
    Pass.

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